What's the difference between a trip and a journey?

Okay, I have a 9000 word Buffy fic that I need someone to look over and tell me if it sucks, sucks but is salvageable, or is good and could use a touch up. If you can do that ASAP (like sometime today or tomorrow would be good) leave your email in (screened!) comments.

Did I mention that all work on this has to be done in a week? Oh self, why do you procrastinate so?

Title: Cavatina
Author: Fluff
Rating: PG
Wordcount: 1863
Disclaimer: I can't keep my tenses straight. I'm not even sure I got my facts right, despite my extensive use of google. God forbid that I should become an author.
Summary: "A short and simple melody performed by a soloist that is part of a larger piece." A look into Lily and James through their lives. Prompt was music.
Feedback: I'm not sure that people realize how much feedback makes my day/night/ever. I TELL PEOPLE when I get reviews. I celebrate with food when I get the first review on a story. It makes me so so so so happy. Please be awesome and review.
Dedication: This is for banana7pancakes  who requested it in this long ago meme that I am failsauce at. I'm not supposed to be on LJ right now, but I somehow managed to piece this together after seven months of work and I figured I should post it. Sorry it took so long (you probably don't even remember this happening) and I hope you enjoy. Also to leni_ba and kairosimperfect. Yours are coming, I promise.
A/N: I'm not 100% satisfied with this, but I just needed to finish it and get it out there.

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